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TASK : Should governments spend more money on improving roads and highways, or should governments spend more money on improving public transportation (buses, trains, subways)? Why? Use specific reasons and details to develop your essay.

第一篇內容：

　　Should governments spend more money on improving roads and highways or on improving public transportations? There seems to be a difficult problem since many reasons should be involved. However, after carefully pondering it, I buttress the last one, spending the money on improving public transportation. The reasons are presented below:

　　There is no denying that improving the public transportation will surely alleviate the pollution given off by enormous cars. If a city has not a developed public transportation, the air will be polluted more heavily. What a dirty environment we will live in! Every day breathing into the air filled with the flour of the gasoline, seeing the sky with the dull color will be the title of our life. So the essence of environment has been realized by an increasingly number of people, to the governments, the protection of environment is especially an undeniable mission.

　　Another reason I agree with it is that developed public transportation will decrease the frequency of the traffic jams. Perhaps no worse word than “traffic jams” exists, to the businessmen who believe in “Time is money”. Traffic jams not only cost the people time and expense, but also create a bad mood for work. It greatly decreases the efficiency of the whole city. I imagine how can a city whose avenue full of traffic jams develop its economics?

　　Finally, I want to say that improving the public transportation provide a great number of ways of transportation for most of the poor people who can not afford to buy a car. It is known that our citizens is not made of only people who has the ability to own a car, but the very poor people are also included. I believe that however the technology is improved, the public apparatus should not be ignored, because it serves the people all over the city.

　　Nevertheless, the private transportation has its own advantages, for instance, it can save a lot of time in some cases, provide some convenience for people. But improving on roads and highways is advantageous only conditionally. Based on the above discussion, I agree with the opinion that the government should spend money on improving public transportation not only it can protect environment and save time for people, but it also can create a convenient environment for all the citizens.

第二篇內容：

With the improvement of life standard, more and more people choose to buy a car and drive to the office, which cause a severe traffic jam. The government wants to spend more money solving the problem and there are two methods: one is to improve the roads and highways; another is to improve public transportation, such as buses, trains, and subways. As for me, I prefer the latter one.

First of all, better public transportation systems, including buses, trains and subways, will encourage more people to use them rather than drive their own cars. This will reduce the total amount of traffic on the roads and make travel quicker for everyone. Experiences inform us that the terrible traffic has troubled us a lot and nothing can be more persuasive than my own experience. My mother always drives me to the school; frequently I get stuck on my way to the school in the rush hour; to make it worse, it usually take one or two hours on the road. That is too terrible. Therefore, if the government decides to make public transportation better, I am convinced that after the improvement, the citizens, including me, are more willing to choose public transportation because of the relatively low price and punctuality. 
In addition, the improvement of public transportation will lead to the better protection of the environment. There is no denying that improving the public transportation will surely alleviate the pollution given off by enormous cars. Moreover, if a city has not a developed public transportation, the air will be polluted more heavily, which does harm to people’s health. 

Although improving roads and highways also have its seemingly profound advantages, it still has some problems. For one thing, it will waste much more money and time, compared to the improvement of public transportation. Typically, it takes at least one year to build roads, and costs millions of money, which is bad for the further development of a city, especially in term of the financial burden.  For another, noise, dusts and more severe traffic jam during the construction of roads and subways will definitely influence people’s daily life negatively. 

Judging from all the evidence offered above, we are now aware that we should take all the factors into consideration and draw the conclusion that it is the best alternative for us now to improve the public transportation. Only in this way can we enjoy quicker traffic and cleaner environment.